Issues reflection

Writing this issues paper was hard, but was worth it in the end. I wrote my paper without knowing what my thesis statement was, so the first paper I wrote wasn't really clear. It aggrovated me a little that I had to write my entire paper over again at first, but then I realized that while I was writing my paper the second time, I understood what I wanted to talk about and had a clear and concise thesis statement. I think overall my second paper came out to be better than the first and was worth writing over. I've learned a lot about the topic I wrote about. Although this paper was hard to write, I think that I've gained more knowledge and experience that will help me in the future, making it worth all the struggles I went through.    

Outline of my RA article

AIDS in India: written in 2004. By Melinda French Gates

• Intro
• India=fast growing economy
• skilled work force
• climbing literacy rates
• fueled optimism
• In poverty
• Body
• Epidemic
• over 4million people infected with AIDS
• expert estimation--20 mill by the end of decade
• twice the size of New York City
• HIV prevention measures in India
• Personal experience
• Gita
• Work with protection
• 70% codom use
• HIV reduced to 66 percent
• "We Shall Overcome"
• active role in educating sex workers
• More women should be empowered
• Truck drivers
• 80% of time on the road
• have sex with commercial sex workers
• 10 times more likely to have HIV
• Infected on road:
• pass it on to their wives/girlfriends
• Now being educated
• Most don't know what HIV is
• If they die from HIV:
• Wives are blamed
• kicked out of home with children
• Resolution:
• Talk about HIV
• Personal devotion
• company donations
• 10 million children die every year
• 2/3 could be prevented with vaccines
• Personal thoughts:
• hopeful India can change
• Conclusion
• India's needs
• more condoms
• more clinics
• more testing
• more info
• more treatment
• Individuals can make a difference
• educate your friends, family
• volunteer for local organizations
• donate to organizations
• Global Fund to Fight AIDS, TB and Malaria
• If sucessful
• economies will boom
• children will thrive
• democracies will flourish
• women shall overcome

 

5 soucres

Title:	Truman and the bomb.
Authors:	Hamby, Alonzo L.

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Title:	Yasui Kaoru: citizen-scholar in war and peace.
Authors:	Orr, James J.1

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The Manhattan Project (and Before)

http://nuclearweaponarchive.org/Usa/Med/Med.html

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Harry_S._Truman

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Franklin_D._Roosevelt

Thesis

Hey guys I used the Thesis Generator. (Just to let you know)


Topic: How American Presidents Affected WWII
Stance: I'm still thinking about it, but I think I'm most likely going to write from a positive view
Rationale: I think they're works were overlooked, and that they should get more credit
Opposition: Although these Presidents helped America, they also caused great sufferings in Japan

Reflection of RA

The RA essay was one of the hardest papers I have ever written. I wanted to write a summary so badly, it took me hours just to type out 3 pages of pure analysis. However, overall I think it was good to write an analysis, because it made me work harder, and taught me a lot.

Another thing I struggled with was transistions. I rarely use transistions, even though I know it helps the reader, and makes the paper stronger. However, after all the peer reviews, I think my paper flows much better, and has smoother transistions than what I started with.

Thanks for all the help group memebers! Your comments were/are greatly appreciated. Because of you, I'm sure I will get a better grade!:)

Peer review links

Could someone comment the peer review links please!! I didn't get the email, but I want to give my group some feedback. Thanks!:)

Tone

The author of AIDS and India used various tools such as imagery and respectful diction to create a professional and eye opening essay.
Gates (the author of AIDS and India) starts her essay by giving outrageous statistics that most people have never seen before. Because she was writing to people in America, she gave an image of how enourmous the issue of AIDS could reach. By saying "twice the population of New York City," she is able to put a mental image in our minds because New York City is something we, Americans, can relate to.
Instead of giving "sex workers" the name of prostitutes, she shows respect towards these people. Prostitute has a negative connotation; if she had used this word, she wouldn't have made as much of an impact on the reader than she did. In her essay she wrote about a sex worker, Gita, that she had the highest respect towards. Had she used the term proststiute, she would have confused the reader as to if she repected her or not.

Late Blog Post: AIDS and India

"AIDS and India" is an effective argument to convince everyone who knows what AIDS is and what it can do to the human body to spread the knowledge, inform others of raising numbers of victims, and show the ignorance of developing countries, to show logical reasons why we should inform others of AIDS.

The Globalized Village

The writer brings up the lives that were lost due to the spread of globalization; which is one of her most persuassive arguments. Who would've thought farmers would commit suicide because of globalization? I sure didn't. Farmers in India are commiting suicide, trying to show their outrage towards globalization. However, farmers aren't the only people dying; ordinary people are as well. Unlike the farmers in India, the oridnary person is dying because of lack of water. The writer said the Hyundi building in India is sucking up all of India's water and electricity; therefore leaving the inhabitants of India with little to no water.
The author of this article brought up various good points about the negative effects of globalization, but I think her best point was the effect it had on the local Indian community.

Oped process

The OpEd process was overall sucessful. I don't think I've ever enjoyed writing a paper before, which made this paper different. It was nice to rant about a topic that's been bothering me for quite some time. I think, in a way, it was like killing two birds with one stone; I got to rant and had a good topic for the assingment. The only thing I had a problem with was the page limit. For some reason I couldn't shorten my paper enough; I guess I just had too many suggestions.

Peer Reviews

My first thought about the peer review process was a little dull. I've went through peer reviews before, and they never really seemed to much fun. Those 45 minutes in high school passed by so slow, but today the time seemed to pass by rather quickly. After the reviews today, I think the reviewing process is very useful and fun.
After my partner and I exchanged papers, she gave me some suggestions about my paper. Her insight was very helpful, because although I gave my paper to another person to review, they didn't catch the same things she did.
Except for allowing the reviewers more time to give feedback and read over papers, I'm not sure how the peer reviews could have been better. We all had the chance to listen to each others papers, and give good and bad feedback to eachother.

In honor of my partner's Opinion Editorial:

Anything..

I'm not really sure what to write about, so I guess I'll write about whatever comes to mind first. Guess I'm writing about the weekend! Everyone ready for the weekend?! I know I am. Even though we've only been in school for four days this week, I feel like this week was draining. As a result, I know exactly what I'm going to do; I'm going to sleep in. Anyone have any exciting plans?

In honor of my goal, here's a site to entertain you all:
http://www.abc.net.au/science/sleep/facts.htm

OpEd part 2

Alright guys, when I made my first post about the OpEd, I didn't think about who I was writing it to. Which means I didn't specifically make it out to BYU students, so I was thinking of a new topic if the others don't work out. The new topic I was thinking about was sanitary problems I see around campus. I'm not sure what to do now really, so if you guys have any suggestions, please let me know!

For this OpEd topic:

Audience: Faculty and students at BYU
Arguement: We should be more considerate to others, and practice better sanitary habits.
I hope to inform others of the risks they take when they're unsanitary, and steps they can take to be sanitary. Once again, I'm not sure if this is a good idea, so any input is appreciated!

OpEd

One of the choices for my opinion editorial I was thinking about is about a quote, which generally has to do with the way we treat others. I feel that the world is becoming more blind to others and their feelings, which causes more pain in the world.

Another topic I was thinking about is how we treat wild animals. We disreguard them, and sometimes ignore or even go out of our way to harm them. I want to make an impact on people that will at least give them the idea that treating animals harshly is against the law and is immoral.

The last topic I was thining about why every school should have a mixture of cultures. Every culture has something to share with the world. Each culture has certain foods, languages, and thoughts that are not always shared with other cultures. Because of this, we all have something to share. Each of us come from different cultures that can benefit others. It allows others to taste different creations, speak another language, and even see things in a different perspective. We all have something to offer to the world, the thing is, do we know it?

About me

Ever since I was young, I knew I wanted to become a doctor. Both my parents are doctors, so I guess that influenced me a little. However, that's not the only thing that influenced me to make becoming a doctor a goal. I always wanted to help others ever since I was younger. My parents suggesting the medical field was only an eye opener to my life long dream.