Reflection of RA

The RA essay was one of the hardest papers I have ever written. I wanted to write a summary so badly, it took me hours just to type out 3 pages of pure analysis. However, overall I think it was good to write an analysis, because it made me work harder, and taught me a lot.

Another thing I struggled with was transistions. I rarely use transistions, even though I know it helps the reader, and makes the paper stronger. However, after all the peer reviews, I think my paper flows much better, and has smoother transistions than what I started with.

Thanks for all the help group memebers! Your comments were/are greatly appreciated. Because of you, I'm sure I will get a better grade!:)

Peer review links

Could someone comment the peer review links please!! I didn't get the email, but I want to give my group some feedback. Thanks!:)

Tone

The author of AIDS and India used various tools such as imagery and respectful diction to create a professional and eye opening essay.
Gates (the author of AIDS and India) starts her essay by giving outrageous statistics that most people have never seen before. Because she was writing to people in America, she gave an image of how enourmous the issue of AIDS could reach. By saying "twice the population of New York City," she is able to put a mental image in our minds because New York City is something we, Americans, can relate to.
Instead of giving "sex workers" the name of prostitutes, she shows respect towards these people. Prostitute has a negative connotation; if she had used this word, she wouldn't have made as much of an impact on the reader than she did. In her essay she wrote about a sex worker, Gita, that she had the highest respect towards. Had she used the term proststiute, she would have confused the reader as to if she repected her or not.

Late Blog Post: AIDS and India

"AIDS and India" is an effective argument to convince everyone who knows what AIDS is and what it can do to the human body to spread the knowledge, inform others of raising numbers of victims, and show the ignorance of developing countries, to show logical reasons why we should inform others of AIDS.

The Globalized Village

The writer brings up the lives that were lost due to the spread of globalization; which is one of her most persuassive arguments. Who would've thought farmers would commit suicide because of globalization? I sure didn't. Farmers in India are commiting suicide, trying to show their outrage towards globalization. However, farmers aren't the only people dying; ordinary people are as well. Unlike the farmers in India, the oridnary person is dying because of lack of water. The writer said the Hyundi building in India is sucking up all of India's water and electricity; therefore leaving the inhabitants of India with little to no water.
The author of this article brought up various good points about the negative effects of globalization, but I think her best point was the effect it had on the local Indian community.