Issues reflection

Writing this issues paper was hard, but was worth it in the end. I wrote my paper without knowing what my thesis statement was, so the first paper I wrote wasn't really clear. It aggrovated me a little that I had to write my entire paper over again at first, but then I realized that while I was writing my paper the second time, I understood what I wanted to talk about and had a clear and concise thesis statement. I think overall my second paper came out to be better than the first and was worth writing over. I've learned a lot about the topic I wrote about. Although this paper was hard to write, I think that I've gained more knowledge and experience that will help me in the future, making it worth all the struggles I went through.    

Outline of my RA article

AIDS in India: written in 2004. By Melinda French Gates

• Intro
• India=fast growing economy
• skilled work force
• climbing literacy rates
• fueled optimism
• In poverty
• Body
• Epidemic
• over 4million people infected with AIDS
• expert estimation--20 mill by the end of decade
• twice the size of New York City
• HIV prevention measures in India
• Personal experience
• Gita
• Work with protection
• 70% codom use
• HIV reduced to 66 percent
• "We Shall Overcome"
• active role in educating sex workers
• More women should be empowered
• Truck drivers
• 80% of time on the road
• have sex with commercial sex workers
• 10 times more likely to have HIV
• Infected on road:
• pass it on to their wives/girlfriends
• Now being educated
• Most don't know what HIV is
• If they die from HIV:
• Wives are blamed
• kicked out of home with children
• Resolution:
• Talk about HIV
• Personal devotion
• company donations
• 10 million children die every year
• 2/3 could be prevented with vaccines
• Personal thoughts:
• hopeful India can change
• Conclusion
• India's needs
• more condoms
• more clinics
• more testing
• more info
• more treatment
• Individuals can make a difference
• educate your friends, family
• volunteer for local organizations
• donate to organizations
• Global Fund to Fight AIDS, TB and Malaria
• If sucessful
• economies will boom
• children will thrive
• democracies will flourish
• women shall overcome

 

5 soucres

Title:	Truman and the bomb.
Authors:	Hamby, Alonzo L.

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Title:	Yasui Kaoru: citizen-scholar in war and peace.
Authors:	Orr, James J.1

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The Manhattan Project (and Before)

http://nuclearweaponarchive.org/Usa/Med/Med.html

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Harry_S._Truman

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Franklin_D._Roosevelt

Thesis

Hey guys I used the Thesis Generator. (Just to let you know)


Topic: How American Presidents Affected WWII
Stance: I'm still thinking about it, but I think I'm most likely going to write from a positive view
Rationale: I think they're works were overlooked, and that they should get more credit
Opposition: Although these Presidents helped America, they also caused great sufferings in Japan

Reflection of RA

The RA essay was one of the hardest papers I have ever written. I wanted to write a summary so badly, it took me hours just to type out 3 pages of pure analysis. However, overall I think it was good to write an analysis, because it made me work harder, and taught me a lot.

Another thing I struggled with was transistions. I rarely use transistions, even though I know it helps the reader, and makes the paper stronger. However, after all the peer reviews, I think my paper flows much better, and has smoother transistions than what I started with.

Thanks for all the help group memebers! Your comments were/are greatly appreciated. Because of you, I'm sure I will get a better grade!:)

Peer review links

Could someone comment the peer review links please!! I didn't get the email, but I want to give my group some feedback. Thanks!:)

Tone

The author of AIDS and India used various tools such as imagery and respectful diction to create a professional and eye opening essay.
Gates (the author of AIDS and India) starts her essay by giving outrageous statistics that most people have never seen before. Because she was writing to people in America, she gave an image of how enourmous the issue of AIDS could reach. By saying "twice the population of New York City," she is able to put a mental image in our minds because New York City is something we, Americans, can relate to.
Instead of giving "sex workers" the name of prostitutes, she shows respect towards these people. Prostitute has a negative connotation; if she had used this word, she wouldn't have made as much of an impact on the reader than she did. In her essay she wrote about a sex worker, Gita, that she had the highest respect towards. Had she used the term proststiute, she would have confused the reader as to if she repected her or not.